▶ Your Answer : Most students want to learn up-to-date knowledge and common sense at school. Some people insist that the connection of teachers with students is more significant than they are experts in their fields while others disagree. I agree with the latter statement. In this writing, I will represent main reasons why teachers should be experts in their fields based on my experiences for the following two subsequent reasons.
First of all, student can learn more things easily and study harder when teachers are familiar with their specialties. Good teachers always make all their effort to learn and teach state-of-the-art things related to their majors to their students. For example, when I was in high school, I had a chance to took a class that renowned Physics teacher in his major teaches at my school. While taking a class which he taught, I was able to understand and learn more Physics things than I expected in an efficient way on the ground that he is familiar with his specialty than any others did at my school. Also, he motivated me to study it harder because his teaching way made me love to study physics. So, I got good mark of Physics test. Thus, I powerfully think that if teachers are familiar with their specialties, students can learn more and study harder.
Additionally, if teachers are experts in their fields, they will offer a lot of information related to their majors for their students who want to enter colleges in the same major. Teachers have responsibility for helping their student to choose major suited for them. For instance, my friend Jo wanted to specialize in art in a college because he really liked to drawing objects. But, he did not have enough information on it. So, he asked a teacher who was expert in Art what he should prepare to major in Art and enter an Art school. She gave him a variety of pamphlets about lots of schools and books regarding Art. By means of the material she gave him, he had more interest in Art as well as selected an Art school which fits on him. Therefore, I firmly assert that teachers have to be experts in their fields to play a important role in helping students to make decision of their future.
In conclusion, I have shown main grounds why teachers have to have a lot of information on their major now that students can learn and study more and get more information on their future. I strongly believe that there are advantages.
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