The best teachers are in genuine, my parents. We live in complexed society in our time. People think that the best teachers are persons who respect their childrens' viewpoints. However, I don't agree with common people's opinion. I suppose that the best teachers are my parents because they well know and understand me, for we have lived together for nineteen years. Moreover, my parents help me when I experience hardships through their rich experience.
my own parents 라고 안하고 그냥 my parents... 단수하고 복수를 잘 쓰시면 좋을것 같네요..단어 선택도 잘하시고여.. 글구 because they have known and understood me 에서 제가 바꾼것처럼 쓰셔야져..지금은 이해 안하는거 아니자너여...글구 best teachers are persons who respect their children's viewpoints 있자너여..그건 님이 제가 쓴 글처럼 표현하구 싶었던건지 이해가 잘 안가네욤... 글구.. 보통 agree with 는 거의 숙어로 가치 씁니다..사전 같은거 찾아보시면 나올꺼에여...
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│ The best teacher is genuine my own teacher. We live in so complexed society in our time. People think that the best teacher is a person who raise their offspring's point in their school. However, I don't agree common people's opinion. I suppose that the best teacher is my parents because they have well known and understood me, for we have lived together nineteen years ago. Moreover, my parents help me when I experience my own anguish through their rich experience.
│ First, it is my parents who the berst understand to me. When I was young, I lived with my parents. They have lived together whenever; happy, astonished, sad, puzzled and upset. And following the ABC statistics, seventy percent of whole think that their parents are the best teacher. Futher, they provide us with norm and roles and basic courtesy. In other words, they teach us about wisdom for living and common sense than a formular of mathematics or chemistry.
│ On the other hand, they offer us ability of solving problem in their lives. All parents live longer than ourselves. That is, parents who widely experienced many hardships. When I was 15 years old, my mental healthy had fallen because I reach puberty. I 'm so annoying that I am irritated with my sister, brother even my parents. They, however, are generally accept to me. Three days later, they whispered to me,"Are you O.K? Do you think I pestered you? So, putting your emotions into some words, claim the words!" When I followed it, I found that my feeling is better than that. As a result, I realized my parents also my own best teacher.
│ In summary, each parents has affection, interest and considering any other than. When we are discouraged, they help us with their warm heart. Although society provide us with knowledgeable teachers, most of the time parents are the best teachers. This is why I agree this statement.
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