Televisions and movies impact people's thoughts and make them a bit passive. These days, TVs have already spreaded out and we can easliy go to movies in downtowns. Through examples and specific explanations, I will demonstrate why TVs and movies have some disadvantages.
너무 문장이 복잡하고..명확하지가 않네요~ 에세이는 항상 짧고 명료하게 하는게 좋아여..길게 할려다보니 문법오류가 많이 생기네요..
제 생각대로 막 고친거 지성하고 저두 허접하니..다른고수분한테 갈켜달래여~ 그럼 열뜀히 공부해여
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│ 007 How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
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│ The TV and movies make people have an impact on their thought and become a passive one. These days, the TV is already spreaded out in our surroundings, and we can easliy go to the movie in downtown. Now, through the use of a couple of example and specific explanation, I will demonstrated why the TV and movies have some disadvantages above mentioned.
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│ First, the TV and movies have an impact on our thought and minds. Generally, man is supposed to be affected through seeing and listening. For example, I read newspaper some youths who watched the murder scene on TV tried to commit a crime like that. Especially, it is not exaggeration to say that juvenile adolescence's increase is responsible to the TV and movies.
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│ Secondly, when we watch TV and movies, we can have no enough time to think and decide. So we are susceptible to be passive. Admittedly watching TV and movies can be addictive. For instance, people use a slang which was on air without recognizing what they say. And watching a TV commercials, we are likely to to buy clothes on impluse.
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│ In conclusion, as we considered, there two points how the TV and movies affect us. They make us have an effect directly on our thought and minds, and become a passive one. So we need more concern the children when they watch TV or movies by themselves.
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