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University's investment plan has increasingly gained many people's attentions. Some of the people contend that university should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. However, I disagree this statement because the ultimate aim of university education is the advancement of studies and the university's money should benefit not only a small number of students but also all students.
First, universities should further focus on students' studies. A number of students enter university to study in their major, and not to enjoy sports. Libraries help us research by providing the necessary books, newspapers, and magazines you need to do research for your college courses. I specialize in economics which is so difficult that I often find various materials in library. Likewise, others' situation is equal to mine. If universities give the same amount of money to students' sports activities and library, universities' library can fall behind other institutes and students cannot enough to study. Therefore, I disagree that universities' budget spend on students' sports activities and library samely.
Moreover, the execution of universities' budget should be impartial to every student. Hobby of students who attend university is various. In other words, students who are interested in sports are part of all students. Therefore, it is not unreasonable that university offer the same amount of money with library where all students study and research to their students' sports activities.
In conclusion, I believe that universities should spend more money on the libraries than on students' sports activities in that not only is the advancement of learning the essence of university education but also the university should fairly execute its budget for every student.