Parents are the closest people to their children, therefore, they influence them a lot.
When children try something new, usually they follow their parents' way. There are two
most differences between good and bad parents' educational effects on their children.
First of all, good parents, in general, show exemplary behavior, and way of life. They
present{re(다시)-present(주다) 임으로 present 로 바꿔야될듯..} their love and care to children directly if possible. Then children can feel very comfortable and can get self-pride. Sometimes, good parents blame children when they lie(made a 는 불필요), or misbehave .They try to be genuine if possible when teaching their children. Then children can notice their parents' truth. In these situations, parents are good example for children's future.
so, then 이 불필요하게 많이 들어간거 같네요..그리고 내용이 주제와 일치하지 않는거 같네요..
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│ 0002 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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│ Parents are the closest people to their children, so they influence a lot to them.
│ When children do something new, usually they follow their parents' way. There are two
│ most differences between good and bad parents' educational effects on their children.
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│ First of all, good parents, in general, show nice behavior, and way of life. They
│ represent their love and care to children directly as possible. Then children can feel very
│ comfortable and can get self-pride. Sometimes, good parents blame children when they
│ made a lie, or other bad behaviors. They try to be genuine as possible when teach their
│ children. Then children can notice their parents' truth. In these situations, parents are
│ good example of children for the future.
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│ Otherwise, There are also bad parents, I mean they influence to their children in
│ negative way. For example, one father is a alcoholic. He doesn't care his children, even
│ he bothers them. In this case, perhaps, children recognize "I won't be this kind of
│ person." Children can learn also from their bad parents' way of life.
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│ In conclusion, every kind of parents affect their children in every way. Children can
│ learn lot of things from both good and bad behavior of their parents. I also learn from
│ my parents a lot from their behavior. Parents of the whole world, please show your
│ best things to your children! You are the most powerful and effective teacher to your
│ children.
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