▶ Your Answer : Many diplomatic issues are still emerging because of not apologizing historical faults done by ancients. (What does it mean?) One of the examples is comfort woman, the sexual slavery, issue between Japan and Korea. Korean still require Japan to apologize what their ancestors had done to Korean comfort women, while Japan think sexual slavery had done in the past and they do not have to point out it in the present. Some people insists that concerns on concerning about present and future is much more important than analysis on comprehending the past. However, in my opinion, analyzing and understanding the past issues are is crucial to deal with obstacles which occur now and in the future.
To begin with, history is rotating. (Too simply suggested) For instance, the world wars which are the biggest disasters made by human occurred twice. The first word war was triggered by counties which have a desire to conquer other countries and rule over them. The second word war was also initiated by German, have a purpose desire to unify Europe and control all composition countries. The reason why the wars are started is very similar. If they really considered and learned from the fist world war, the second world war would not have occurred and seized led to numerous people to death 's lives.
Second, it is much easier and effective to prevent repeating the same mistake than trying not to make a mistake which have never made so far. (Make it clear) We can foresee and get ready for what we have experienced before but we do not have any way to predict events that have not occurred before unless there are magicians. Researchers can gather previous data and analyze them in order to find the way to deal with the same situation better when it occurs. According to the famous quotation, the failure is mother of the success. We can learn from failures we experienced and find other ways to overcome in next time.
To sum up, events occurred before is more likely to appear again and we can gather many information from previous experiences. In this regard, analyzing the past is very prominent for us to overcome latter disasters.
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