▶ Your Answer : The lecturer argues that there are still not responsible reason of the bison's extinction. This contradicts the reading passage's claim that there are three reason of the death.
First, the lecturer point out that just a few of hunters hunted. For instance, over 60 bisons were lived in plants. And small number of hunters was hunted. Just a few hunters couldn't hunt every bisons. This casts doubt on the reading passage's claim that the most reason for the death of so many bison is overhunting.
Second, the lecturer explain that drought wasn't unordinary weather. Moreover, in middle century, the weather was more worse but many bison was alived. This counter the reading passage's claim that the possible cause of the near extinction of the bison is drought.
Lastly, the lecturer asserts that disease couldn't become a reason of bison's dead. Because disease began 18 century later but the decline of bison's population was started beforestarting disease. This refutes the reading passage's claim that the dead of bison may have been caused by disease.
점수: 22 리딩에 대한 정보가 많이 부족한 통합형 에세이입니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우는 각 단락에 있어서 리딩에 대한 부분을 한 문장으로만 서술하였습니다. 한 문장으로 끝내는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 부분들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |