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Opinions might be divided over whether hindering children
from watching television could encourage children to study harder. People of
various ages and from different walks of life may take a diverse
positions on the controversial issue. I side with the perspective that it is
not an effective way to prohibit children from watching television to uplift
their studies for the following two reasons: watching television will be
conducive to get a lot of backgrounds to study and it is evident for children
to do something else even though their parents hinder the children from
watching television.
To begin with, watching
television will be great tools a great tool
for children in order to know about many backgrounds. Knowing
a lot of backgrounds can contribute to helping their understanding and
studying. Opponents of my perspective claim that TV would be a great
negative factor that keeps children from
studying. Advocates' claim might be reasonable enough on the surface. However,
if we take a closer look at their contentions, the
rationale for their assertions lacks logic in many ways. Moreover, my personal
example can definitely debunk their claims. When I was in high school, I
usually liked watching a television programs.
For this reason, I got so many kinds of knowledge from the television programs.
Therefore, when I was studying at that time, I felt that I could understand
easily the science sector because I know knew about many things, so I could concentrate on
studying more easily and end up being encouraged. The same applies to most
people like me.
Besides, it is taken for granted that
children like watching television, so if they do not watching television, they
might find something else. Some children who does do not make a habit of studying hard could not do
their best if they does do not want to
learn. In addition to my personal anecdote, many articles from different
newspapers reaffirm my viewpoints. A few weeks ago, I read an op-ed pieces
that is related to the topic. It described the result of a survey, which was
conducted by Seoul National University social science researchers with more
than 500 children as respondents. They were
controlled by the researchers not to see watch
television. The purpose of the survey was to understand the consensus view
about whether watching television or not could encourage children to studying
hardly study hard. Of 500 children surveyed,
over 80 percent answered that they wanted to find another things, specifically
hanging out with their friends or playing games more frequently. This clearly
proves that prohibiting television does not matter to the children when
studying hardly.
As I mentioned above, based on the two examples, I can conclude that I disagrees
with the idea that parents have to avoid letting their children to watch TV in
order to encourage them to study hardly. (study
hardly는 공부를 거의 안 한다는 뜻입니다.)
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