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There is ample
support for the author’s claim that there are is a number of interesting and
plausible hypothesis of (어색한 표현입니다, 주장을 풀어서 설명해주세요) transient lunar phenomena, or TLPs. However, the
speaker in the lecture gives several reasons as a rebuttal to the author’s
point.
To begin with,
the speaker insists that the clouds of lunar gases are not likely to be responsible
for TLPs. This is because it is just a coincidence. He says that only
small gases escape to the surface of the Moon. This casts doubt on the reading
passage’s claim that clouds of lunar lead to occur TLPs. On top of that, the
speaker argues that illuminated clouds of dust should be large enough to be
seen in the Earth, but such dust storms do not occur in the Moon. In
particular, he mentioned astronomers in Apollo programs. They explored the
surface of the Moon, and they found free of dust particles on the surface. This
refutes the reading passage’s assertion that TLPs are clouds of dusts floating
above the lunar landscape. Finally, the speaker maintains that the theory,
which holds that TLPs are caused by solar radiation, is based on insufficient data.
Following the overall data, The data sometimes did match up they matched up, but often they missed (어떤 부분들이 match되었다는 것인지 부연 설명이 필요해보입니다).
It shows that there is no exact correlation between TLPs and solar radiation.
This counters the reading passage’s suggestion that solar radiation gives rise
to occur TLPs occurences.
Score: 18 Comments: - 전체적인 구조에 조금 더 신경써주세요. 세 개의 body paragraph(단락)으로 세 포인트를 정리해주셔야 합니다. - 문법 실수들이 있습니다 rise to occur (X), lead to occur (X) - 주요 포인트를 잘 담아주셨으나 설명이 더 필요한 부분들이 있습니다. 예를 들어 세번째 포인트에서 어떤 데이터를 말하는 것인지 조금 더 풀어서 설명해주셨으면 좋았을 것 같아요. 수고하셨습니다.
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