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Some people are tended to regard art and music classes less valuable than other subjects like math, history, science and language classes. However, I believe art and music should be mandatory courses just like other courses. There are two reasons for it. Those classes help children to develop their talents and to relieve stress. First of all, art and music classes is very effective for students to develop their talents. Every student has their own ability and their ability can be shown in various fields such as math, history, music and so on. Therefore, students should be exposed to such anopportunity to discover their own talent during art and music class. For example, when I was in middle school there was a friend of mine who is talented for drawing people. One day in art class, he drew a picture of himself and he received a lot of compliment from the teacher. From that day, he realized his talent and practiced drawing hardly. As a result, he is now majoring in western art in university. Making art and music as mandatory school subjects is so important in that it can be a crucial motivation for someone to find his or her talent. Next, art and music courses can relieve students’ stress. It is verified many times that art and music is effective to relieve people’s stress and now art and music is used to cure depression people who are depressed. For instance, when I was in high school, I was too depressed preparing for the Korean SAT. It was so stressful to me to sit in front of desk and study all days. But, whenever I sing or draw pictures in art and music class, I could forget about all the worries every stress I got from rest of the days. Especially, when I sang ‘I have a dream’ in music class, I really could refresh myself and start to study hard again to pass Korean SAT. Considering this advantage, It it undeniable that students need art and music courses to relieve stress like me. For these reasons, art and music classes are useful to students since students can discover their talent and refresh themselves during the classes. In this regard, I firmly claim that art and music courses should be mandatory courses in school. 채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 2 | 3 | 2 | 3 | Score | Fair 16-19 | - 문장의 흐름이 다소 매끄럽지 않습니다. 정확한 표현과 문장을 사용하여 주시기 바랍니다.
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