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Some people think the government should
spend money on recreational facilities other than museums and music
performances. However, in my opinion, it is better to increase the governmental
expenditure on the recreational facilities such as public play grounds and
swimming pools. There are two reasons: fFirst, it can help people with their
health management. Second, it helps people relieve their stress.
To begin with, inducing people to engage in
more active plays can increase their physical health than sedentary activities.
To be specific, the importance of health should be prioritized. Nothing can be
achieved without good health. Like there is saying "Sound body, sound
mind", health can improve a person's work productivity and make people
self-confident. I have one friend who is always ill so she cannot do her best
in her job, and she even quit the job due to her health problems. However,
there is another friend who always is in good shape. She puts her effort as best
as she could in her work, and she earns a lot of money and very succeeded in her
job. When I asked her what is the secret of her good health, she told me that
when she was young, she had used many recreational facilities in her town since
the mayor put a lot of money in them. Thanks to the mayor, she got the
foundation for a good health.
On the top of that, it is obvious that
recreational facilities can help people relieve stress. In other words, having
the outlet for stress has a meaning in itself since it can help one regain
energy and find the strength to go on. People nowadays have pressure not only
physically but also mentally. It can help people get back on track after
playing in public playgrounds and pools. Last year, it was my last semester in
the graduate school for my master's course and I was working on my research.
There was pressure from my professor, and also from myself that I should get it
done perfectly. Since it takes long time to write an article, I was exhausted.
However, there was Hangang-MongTTang Festiver in Han river which was hosted by
the Seoul City. In the festival, I did a lot of fun plays such as playing with
water guns and riding water slides. It helped my worned-out mind to become
refreshed.
To sum up, considering the fact that
recreational facilities are useful tool for health management and for reducing
stress, I firmly believe that recreational facilities are the better facilities
for the support of the government than the museum and music facilities.
Good (26–30)
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