▶ Your Answer : Some people
think that people with different interests or personalities can be a best
friends. However, I disagree with them because of two reasons; first, it is easy
to make friends with commons and second it is stressful to hang out with
friends who have different personalities.
To begin with,
it takes less effort to make new friends with more common interests. Suppose that you are in a new place and
meet people who never seen before;, would it be possible to talk with the person
who seemed totally different from you and has different interests? Maybe answer
is no. People tend to make relationship with others who seemed similar to them
because it takes a lot of effort to find subjects for talking without common
things. There is a research conducted by students in Psychology psychological majors of Korea University.
They gathered 50 people in one room and let them talk with each other. After 2
hours, they asked respondents to pick three people who are most friendly with
them. The result was surprising ed. Most of picked people have similar major with
respondents even they did not know their major. This research shows that people
prefer the person who has ve similarities.
On the top of
that, trying to meet each other's personality can be stressful. Personality is formed by
environment where the person lived in for decades of year. In fact, it is
almost impossible for a friend to change one's characteristic in short span. For
example, when I was in high school, I met a new a classmate at the beginning of a
semester. She was a really caring person and clever. But she was too meticulous
and dependable while I preferred doing work alone. She wanted to do everything
with me and always checked even unnecessary things. As time goes by, it was
burden for me to hang out with her. We tried to change each other but it
worsened s our relationship and finally we became distant.
To sum up,
concerning the fact that making friends and stressful situations, I think
people with different interest or personalities cannot be friends.
Good (24) 서론 -people의 복수이므로 best friends
첫번째 본문 -첫문장 주장문은 좀더 디테일하게 토픽과 연결되게 써주세요. -명사 앞에 관사 -중간에, 일반적인 얘기이고 문맥상 과거나 미래도 아니므로 seemed-->seem -심리 전공은 psychological major-->Psychology major -the result was surprised 라고 하면, 결과는 놀랐다 라는 의미가 됩니다. 놀라운 결과였다, 라는 뜻은 surprising으로 써주세요. -수 일치
두번째 본문 -each's 어색한 표현입니다. -동사 필요한데 없습니다. is넣어주세요. -명사 앞에 관사 -at the beginning of 구문 -문맥상 과거이므로 worsens-->worsened
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