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Some people claim that universities can enhance the education quality by giving higher salaries to their professors, others think otherwise. Regarding these two different opinion, and I strongly agree with this former opinion. This is because by paying more salaries to professors, universities can hire more not only atrractmore qualified professors, but and they also motivate existing professors to do their job much harder more hard.
To begin with, Universities can improve their quality of education by hiring more competent capable professors, and to hire such professors, the universities have to offer more attractive conditions to entice them.
I would like to take an example of the university that I graduated from. GNU(Guru National University) has been the most prestigious university in Korea. However, It wanted to be an world famous university, so it has decided to make plans to hire more talented and qualified professors, especially in basic science departments such as biology and physics. According to the plan, GNU offered higher salaries to attract some Nobel Prize winners and finally it could get them. These Nobel Prize professors soon achieved and showed high performances in their lectures and studies. The plan turned out to be very successful.
One On top of that, by giving more salaries, universities can stimulate their existing faculty members to achieve higher performances than before, because money is the most powerful inducement to everyone.
In fact, recent polls conducted by GNA showed that increase in annual salary can be a very efficient method to motivate professors to do their lectures and studies harder and better. According to this polls before and after annual salary increase, most of the professors surveyed responded that annual salary rise helped them have a stronger sense of responsibility and self-esteem than ever and that this enhanced sense of responsibility and self-esteem made the professors to dedicate themselves to their lectures and studies more.(Avoid using repeated sentence)
In this regard, I believe that universities can enhance their overall education quality by paying more money to professors because high salary rate can be very efficient inducement to attract new competent professors and to motivate existing faculties members to do their job better and more hard.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 2 | 3 | 2 | 3 | Score | Limited 15-18 | - hard의 비교급인 harder 형태로 나타내주세요.
- Thesis 와 Examples은 붙여 나타내주세요. - 그래머 부분이 다소 약하신 것 같은데, 예를 들면,University, It 모두 첫문장이 아니므로 capital letter로 쓰지 않습니다. 또한 Novel Prize professor라는 명사는 없기에, a professor who received/was awarded the Novel Prize 등으로 정정해주셔야 합니다.
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