Friends play a very important role in this world because people can't live by alone.
Some people believe that it is more important to keep your old friends than it is making new friends since we don't have to spend a large amount of time in making friends, while other people think differently.
If I were asked to choose, I would say that we must make a new friend for developing our ability or personal connection.
There are several reasons and example as follows.
To begin with, if we spend our time with only old friends, our thinking way or perspectives can be limited.
To be specific, a human being has to experience a new thing because, if they don't approach to new or novel knowledge or experience, their brain would not work and function well can be wane.
So, people have to make a new friend in order to prevent their leaning thinking way and broaden their perspective.
For instance, according to an experiment of Tokyo University, people who have a lot of friends have more diverse perspectives than people who play with only old friends.
University divided two teams with their score of friends and they tested them with diverse tendency testing application, team 1's people in team A have a new and many friends and team 2's people in team B spend their time with only long friends.
As a result, the average score of team 1's people in team A was higher than average score of team's people.
What I mean by this is that people can gather a larger amount of emotion or perspective when they have many friends.
On top of that, we can get a colossal power which will be helpful in our future, if we have a lot of new friends.
This is because people's outstanding abilities are different from for each people since each people have their origin and special DNA from their parents.
So, we should make a lot of relationship in order to exploit their good advantage in the future.
For example, when I was an 8, I was very suffered from my actual art test since I could get a high score in test by resolving a question.
But, I couldn't actually draw an awesome art.
However, my art was highly evaluated by A rank since my friend who was talented at a art helped me a lot by checking my art.
If I didn't try to make new friends, I couldn't receive a help from him.
because he was not my deep and old friend, he was consisted in my massive size of relationship.
Sum up, we always have to experience a new thing and we can exploit my friend's gift.
In this regard, I believe that making new friends is more important than lasting relationship with only old friends
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