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Museums which contain numerous
antique artifacts are visited by many tourists that traveled to the surrounding
area. Whereas some people think it mandatory to visit the museum it is thought
of a waste of time by others Some people believe it is mandatory for people to visit museums as it contains numerous unique artifacts.. I firmly believe that tourists should visit
nearby museums when traveling different regions for the following reasons.
First of all, museums help travelers
understand the culture of the surrounding area. Culture is a distinct feature
of an area that is formed over a prolonged period of time of a certain country. By showing the
changes of the area as time passes museums can show what kind and how the culture
was formed. By having a better understanding of the culture it would help to
understand the behaviors of the inhabitants there which will make your trip a
more enjoyable one. My example is a compelling example of this. When For example, when I visited
the Middle East, I was shocked by how religious they were. All of the women had
their entire face covered and they had days that they didn't eat any food.
However, after I visited the nearest museum in the region I was able to
establish a better understanding of their religion.
Second, visiting museums provides
an effective way of learning. Museums allow students to learn knowledge through
daily experience. It provides in depth information about a subject and allows
visitors to stay as long as they want. People will be able to acquire
information about a subject that interests them. Also, these experiences can
teach people skills that cannot be learn from books, such as attitudes, values
and skills. A study conducted by the U.S. Education department showed that interactive
learning, a type of learning where students gain information by personal
experience, showed a 70% higher efficiency than only learning with textbooks. A
survey done during the same time also showed that people preferred learning
from daily experience than from heavy text books. As a result most schools take
students to museums on a regular basis.
In conclusion, I contend that when
visiting a new region tourists should always try to visit a nearby museum
because it is a efficient way to learn the way of life in that region and also
a cost- effective way of learning new information.
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