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Some people think that watching a movie is beneficial only when it deals with a real life while others think differently. Both sides may have their own reasons to support their views. If I had to choose one, I would say that a movie can be more beneficial when it is unrealistic for the two following reasons for the following two reasons. .
To begin with, unrealistic movies can help people to be more creative. If a person wants to foster creativity, it is believed that being fertile in imagination is necessary. Watching unrealistic movies such as science fictions is an effective way to achieve it. Today's limitless competition has made it important to invent and develop original ideas to survive and succeed. Globalized economy has made us to compete with people in other nations. Moreover, the development of technology has made it easier for competitor to find out we have made. Therefore, it is almost impossible to survive without constantly making something new since it is the only way to avoid competition. For example, Apple could have been able to make astronomical amount of profit because they invented continuously innovative things such I-pod, I-pad, and I-phone. Without creativity, they would not have been able to achieve it.
On top of that, when people watch unrealistic movies, they can get rid of stress and recharge their batteries. This is because they can experience something new from what they would do in their real life. Even though it is a vicarious experience, they tend to forget about their problems for a while. For instance, when my younger brother was in high school, he often felt depressed thinking that his life became an exhausting routine. He spent the whole day studying all academic subjects. However, he could deal with such pressure and stress by watching super hero movies during weekends. He felt kind of vicarious thrill out of watching heroes punish evils. Without this experience, he would still have been depressed.
All things considered, I strongly believe that a movie can be more beneficial when it is imaginative. All in all, brilliant imagination in movies cannot be overestimated.
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