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In many countries, since prehistoric times, household
tasks have been belongings of were belonged to woman, specifically to mothers. However it is now
quite common that children share these tasks which I think is a right thing. In
my opinion, it is mandatory to help household tasks regarding changed styles of
modern family and for children themselves. for the following two subsequent two reasons.
First of all, it is now an era of equality. Before 19
century, it was quite uncommon for women to fully engage in work. Thus, it was
generally accepted that woman, specially specifically mother, belongs to household tasks.
But unlike old days However unlike past days, women are now equally socially active as men. Mothers no
longer stick to the house all days to be available for house works. Thus, All of
the family member should share household tasks.
Secondly, families are getting smaller in these days has gotten smaller.
‘nuclear family’, it is a new term that is invented around 2000. It was used to
describe families that consist of 3 or 4. But recently, it is used to describe
people who live independently or just together. This changes in family number
signify that people in nowadays live apart from their family more often and
earlier than any days before. So it is quite obvious that children should do
household tasks in order to live on their own.
As social perceptions on woman and forms or families
changes from the past. It is of course that systems in family changes. In other
words. Mothers are not only ones who are obligated to household tasks but other
family members such as children should be take part of them for their family
and for themselves.
점수: 22 주제를 벗어난 독립형 에세이인거 같습니다. 이 에세이의 주제는 이렇습니다 아이들은 배우는 시기가 빠를 수록 집안일을 해야한다. 하지만 저가 지금 이 에세이를 읽으면 읽어갈 수록 주제와 전혀 관련이 없는 이유를 서술하고 있는 듯 한 느낌이 듭니다. 왜 갑자기 여자에 초점을 두었고 상황이 달라졌다라고 하고 있는 어느 부분에서 왜 아이들이 집안일을 해야하는 지에 대한 설명 조차 안되어 있는 거 같습니다. 이 부분을 숙지하면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |