▶ Your Answer : Some people seek out information from various sources such as literatures. newspapers, textbooks, magazines and web sites when needed. They generally do not get information from news sources. However, in my opinion, I think that we should seek our information from a variety of news sources to be well-informed. By doing so. we can find objective information easily and we can seek out new updated information quickly. To begin with, we can find objective information much more easily if we use news sources that are well organized. Of course, some people say that news can reflect people’s values that make the news because people who make the news can select the information they use. However, despite the dangerousness of subjectivity, many news gives us a lot of balanced information. And there are no replacements of this. To be more specific, I usually watch JTBC news. It provides me various information about social problems to be well-informed. Watching the news, I can think about the social problem based on the fact. Secondly, we can seek out new updated information quickly if we get information from news sources. There is always new information in changing world. And news sources reflect it. For example, when I searched for a law concerned concerning the disabled on Internet, it was different from the recent news. The recent information was not updated on Internet yet. If I did not saw see the news, I may know wrong information about it. It was meaningful experience to know that news sources include everyday happenings. The world is changing rapidly and we should know about the new happenings. News sources are a way to know about the new happenings. Of course, there may be some problem of subjectivity. However, there are no replacements of its objectivity and speedy. And this is why I think people should seek out information from a variety of news sources to be well-informed.
예상 점수: 24-27 총평: 먼저 인트로에서 literatures라는 말은 어색한 표현입니다. books라든지 articles로 바꾸어 주시는게 좋을 것 같아요. 두번째 바디에서도 과거에서 일어나는 일에대한 얘기기 때문에 현재진행형 시제를 사용해주셔야 합니다. 마찬가지로 그 다음 문장에서도 i did not saw는 어법상 말이 안되며, i did not see가 되어야 맞습니다. 수고 많으셨습니다.
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