▶ Your Answer :
In the
reading passage, there are ample support for the author’s claim that why whales
strand on the beach. However, the professor in the lecture gives several reason
as a rebuttal to author’s point.
First, the professor contends that whales
stranding is not accurate. When it comes to wind patterns. They are occurred all
around world. For instance, the wind pattern come from land of east coast in US.
This casts doubt on the reading passage’s claim that whales stranded because of
wind pattern and enter shallow water near shore.
Next, the professor insist that illness which
lead whales to strand not reliable. Stranding is happened frequently, but the volunteers
help whales to go back to the water. Also, they can mostly go back to the water
by themselves. This counters the reading passage’s assertion that illness led
to stranding
Finally, the professor argues that most kinds
of whales use same sonar system. Also, stranding is occurred to some of whales.
If that happening is normal, we can find at least a spot that is happened but people
was not able to find any spots. This refutes the reading passage’s suggestion
that geological features had influence on whale’s sonar system, swimming too near
to beach and being stranding.
점수: 22 리딩에 대한 정보가 많이 부족한 통합형 에세이입니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것 중에 하나는 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우는 리스닝에 대한 정보는 충분하게 잘 전달하고 있습니다. 하지만 리딩에 대한 부분은 한문장으로 끝났습니다. 한 문장으로 끝나는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 부분들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |