■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Proving students with grades promotes learning. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. |
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▶ Your Answer :
Some people believe that it is efficient to estimate students with their grades, which makes students could improve their study. However, my opinion is pretty different. I strongly believe that it is not good to prove students with their score at all. Here are two reasons for my opinion.
First of all, judging students with their grades makes poor students less confident. Furthermore, it makes them stressed out. For example, when I was in middle school second grade, I once made a serious mistake during my first mid-term. Consequently, my grades became really low, and almost all teachers disappointed to me. Even though they were close to me when I was a good student. It gave me a deep shock, and after that, I was really depressed and sad for months.
Secondly, in a school, there are various students who have various benefits. It is natural that each student has a special ability with his or her own field. Thus, people cannot underestimate students just because they have low grades in their school works. There are some students who are good at music, art, or exercise. One of my friends, Hana, did not have high grades in school. On the other hand, she almost seemed like a professional when she played the violin. As a result, she went to one of the most famous music university in our country. Although some teachers did not think her as a good student, all her friends including me were very proud of her.
In a nutshell, I disagree with the statement that the connection between students and their grades is needed and it will become a motivation for students. I firmly think it makes no sense for two reasons, making poor students more depressed and dismissing different abilities of different students. |
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