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There has been an argument regarding the issue of whether comprehending the past is crucial to being able to tackle obstacles facing us now and in the future. Some people maintain that understanding the past is very important to overcome difficulties facing us today and in the future. From my perspective, however, we do not need to look at the past in order to solve the problems we face in our lives for the following two reasons. To begin with, the methods, which we used in the past to solve problems, cannot be used today anymore past solutions can not apply today's circumstances. Since the world has drastically changed, it accompanied changes in people’s life pattern, interest, the international situation, and almost everything as well. People have to find different ways to solve their problems since the former ways are obsolete. For instance, let us say there were two countries which hated each other in the past. They could use several simple methods to solve their problems such as conducting wars or negotiating between the two countries. However, today’s international situation is incomparably different from the past. It has been significantly complicated among many different nations. Moreover, They they (대문자는 문장 시작할 때만 서술하시길 바랍니다) need to consider human rights and even nuclear weapons too. Therefore, understanding the past will not help to solve today’s problems. On top of that, trying too hard to understand the past might hamper the development of our society. If people are obsessed with the past, they might be indifferent to innovative and liberal ideas of today. Then, they will miss many great chances to improve the quality of their lives. For example, if Thomas Edison did not try to invent a new form of a candle, the light bulb, but just bought more candles and fuels as other people had done in the past, he would have not invented the light bulb. This indicates that understanding the past might interfere with the advancement of our society.
Taking everything into consideration, neither comprehending the past does not help to solve problems we face today and it the future, nor it makes our society progress. In this regard, I strongly believe that understanding the past is not that important to tackles obstacles facing us now and in the future.
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