▶ Your Answer :
There might be some people who
believe that airplanes have made more impacts on society than cars. However, in
my opinion, I strongly believe that automobiles have had much more profound effects
on communities for the following two reasons.
First and foremost, the number of
automobiles is far greater than the counterpart. To be specific, horrific
traffic shows the evidence of it obviously. Besides, the prices of cars are relatively
inexpensive. Thus, it is no exaggeration to say that each person possesses each
own car. On the other hand, people in the world have fewer opportunities to get
on a plane, and there exist a plethora of people who never approached the
periphery of airport. To elaborate in detail, metropolis such as Seoul, where I
live, is fully packed of automobiles all the time. Thus, I am always caught in
bad traffic over the course of commute. As a matter of fact, I even suffer from
appalling traffic jam around the clock whenever I drive, which is the
conclusive evidence of social impact of automobile. Predicated on my personal
experience, I strongly believe that cars have profound influences on a society
On top of that, the significance of
logistics by automobiles far outweighs those of airplanes. To put it
succinctly, most of the items in the world are transported by cars such as
truck. Airplanes certainly has benefit which enables parcels and goods to be
delivered over waters, but the distribution quantity is not higher than the other
one for the most part, consuming a lot of money. In addition, making use of
airplanes requires remarkably large spaces such an airport, runway in general.
While the method of delivery by airplane has several constraints, cars render
them redundant, thereby serving as a proper catalyst for an efficient logistics
system. According to a study carried out in 2009 at The University of Seoul, the
efficiency and productivity that comes out of car’s transportation is much higher
than those from airplanes. Thus, automobile is a sine qua non of a modern
society.
To sum up, taking all things into
consideration, there exist many of influences of cars, which have more positive
outcomes on a modern society than airplanes. In this sense, I am of the firm
opinion that cars is of great importance for the people.
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