■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Teachers should be paid according to student’s performance |
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▶ Your Answer : Disagree
Teachers should be paid according to student’s performance Ag/Dis
è Dis
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적성,
Some people think that teachers should be evaluated by the student’s achievements. However, in my opinion, teachers should not be paid differently by their pupil’s scores. There are two reasons.
To begin with, the amount of influence that teachers have on student’s academic achievements is not that great. Although teachers have a role of teaching their students well, a more essential and important part is developing their social abilities. Good teachers are not the ones who teach well but who have a positive influence on their students. To give an anecdote, when I was a middle school student, I first met with teacher Jason. His class was so boring and at no time I thought that his teaching skill is good, but he is the best instructor of my life. He listened to my worry at any time and told me that I can achieve anything I eager. Thanks to him, I got confidence and became a high self-esteem student. Although he didn’t improve any student’s grades, he gave great respect to their students.
On top of that, there will be many side effects if teachers are paid by their outcome. Education purpose of the teachers will be changed because there is no need for the teachers to teach their students outside of exam range. Teachers will teach them only for the examination and student’s range of their knowledge will become so narrow. Furthermore, teachers could force their students to study hard, not giving them opportunities to find their own aptitude. For example, my friend Sally had a great passion for painting. However, when she was a sophomore in high school, her teacher John was just obsessed with scores of their students. He ignored Sally’s personal interest and forced her to concentrate on studying. Thus, she really suffered from her teacher.
To sum up, the role of teachers is not just enhancing their student’s academic performance. Moreover, if they are paid by student’s achievements, that has no positive impacts on students. In this regard, I firmly believe that teachers should not receive money by their pupil’s scores. |
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점수: 28/30
1. 사소한 문법 실수 말고는 흠 잡을 곳이 없습니다!
2. 다만 첫 번째 문단에서 jason teacher에 대한 평가가 너무 극단적입니다.
teaching skill도 어느정도 있는 사람으로 수정이 된다면 더 이해가 쉬울 것 같습니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*