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“Can parents say no to their children’s teacher?” Some people say “no” because the field of teaching in teachers’ is uninterpreted (독립형 에세이에서 의문형은 적절하지 않습니다). However, contrary to this idea In contrast to this idea, it is clear that parents should express their opinion towards the teachers if they recognize something is wrong. The fundamental reason behind this is that teachers are sometimes wrong and every teaching should be for children’s good for the following two subsequent reasons.
First of all, despite teachers are surely expertise in teaching, monkeys can fall from the trees teachers can make mistakes (적절하지 않는 은어는 좋지 않습니다). They have studied and done hard work for teaching, but they don’t know all tactics or methods to handle children right but they do not know the best way to guide students (독립형 에세이에서는 줄인말을 서술하면 안됩니다). Even they had wrong idea how to teach properly. Indeed, some of them are not meant to be a teacher. So, if parents disagree with their teachers, they should stand their opinion they might keep going with their opinion thereby some intervention from parents is needed. From my experience, there was a teacher who used to hit me for low grade. He thought hitting students is best way to make them study. But that was not right. Because my parents strongly arguing with principle, I could be out from devastating situation.
Moreover, the only purpose of teaching is make student happy the purpose of teacher is to make students happy. If children feel upset or unhappy while teaching while learning, it must be changed for their good (이 부분은 무엇을 말하려고 하는 것인가요? 이해가 되지 않습니다). Parents know their children best. So if they feel uncomfortable or unsatisfied with their time in school, parents should make them fixed. Children have right to be happy while studying and parents must support them. If a child looks quiet disappointed and worried because of the teacher, it is time for parents to take care for them in a way of tell school about what they think. For example, my sister had been was so depressed for a long time. She was so unhappy that it nearly make her commit suicide. Thanks for my parents’ effort, it turned out it was because of bullying and her teacher showed indifference about that. If my parents would not interpreted, she might get wrong.
In conclusion, parents should suggest their disapproval towards the teaching. This is because teachers are not always right and teaching should be acts for children’s happiness.
점수: 21 전체적으로 어색한 표현들이 너무 많은 독립형 에세이입니다. 어색한 표현들이 너무 많다 보니까 에세이가 무엇을 말하려고 하는 것인지 모르겠고 본레 자기가 전달하려고 했던 의미들이 변질되게 됩니다. 따라서 지금 이 에세이에서 필요한 것은 제가 지적한 부분들을 숙지하면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |