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There has been argument regarding
the issue of whether people should get information from various news sources so
as to stay well-informed or not. Some people maintain that they should not get
information from various sources. From my perspective, however, people should
get information from various news sources to stay well-informed. In this essay, I will present two
reasons for supporting my idea; first is that people can be biased if they
accept information from one news source, and second is that there are sources
specialized in certain category which can help people better. for the following two subsequent reasons (이미 밑에서 이유들을 다 서술할 것 이기 때문에 인트로를 장황하게 서술할 필요가 없습니다)
Firstly, people can be biased if
they accept information from one news source (이유에 대한 구체적 설명을 하고 난 후에 예시로 넘어가시길 바랍니다). For instance, there are two kinds
of newspapers, one is the conservative and the other is liberal. Even if they
include same incident, they have different point of view. Thus, it is good for
us to get information from both, not to be biased. According to research about
one’s philosophy, the result showed that people who were extreme conservatives
or liberalism all read only one kind of news and believed all of the
information thoughtlessly.
Secondly, there are some news
that are specialized in specific category, such as the Economist. It is true
that we get economic information from other newspaper, however, we can get
deeper materials from particular sources. According to a survey conducted in
Yonsei University, more than 78% of people subscribed a professional news.
Those who subscribed contended that those sources give much more information
than general news. They mentioned that having lots of sources made them have a
great store of knowledge about the economy, society, and many other things.
To sum up, people should get
information from various news sources in order to stay well-informed, or only
accept one source. In this regard, I strongly feel that it is better to accept
information from various news sources.
점수: 22 일단 지금 이 에세이를 읽으 면서 느낀 것은 전체적으로 내용면에 있어서 빈약점이 많이 보이는 독립형 에세이입니다. 빈약점이 많이 보이는 가장 큰 이유는 각 단락의 설명들이 구체적으로나 명확하게 나타나지 않았습니다. 따라서 지금 이 에세이에서 필요한 것은 좀 더 구체적으로 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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