▶ Your Answer :
In this essay, I will present two reasons to support my
idea; first is we can read books by using computers, and second is that it is
easier to get more information through computers.
First of all, paper books are not the only way to read
books. Nowadays, E-books is are very developed, so we can read books by using our
computes, too. The expense for one computer is cheaper than buying so many
books, which is very economical for school finance. Also, it is very tiresome
to order each book that students want; thus, it is economical in a viewpoint of
‘time’. One of the interviews targeting librarians contains, “It is not
difficult to do jobs in library; however, it is too exhausting to get list of
books that people want to read, and order each of them. There are too many same
books, but I must find the exact same one that the consumers want.” Likewise,
it is not a difficult work, rather a tiresome work. Thus, it is more beneficial
to purchase computers for students than books for the library.
The second reason I want to mention is that it is easier to
get information through computers; furthermore, we can get a lot of
information. According to a research taken in Yonsei University, it was much
easier to search by Internet than to search by books. When the investigators
asked about the advantages of using computers, the subjects mentioned two
things: firstly, the computers found the information by keywords; secondly,
books have too much needless information. This is the main reason that students
use computers instead of visiting library. Nowadays, students like to search
information by computers, not going to the library. This means that purchasing
computers for students has a lot more advantages than purchasing books for the
library.
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