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When the new semester starts, many students
are worried about making new friends. There are many ways to make new friends
such as watching movie and playing games. Some people think that going on a
trip or playing group sports is the most effective method to make friends.
However, in my opinion, joining a club is the most efficient way to make
friends, because they can meet friends who are interested in similar things and
they do works that require team work.
First, they can meet friends who have
similar interests by joining a club. It is easier to become friends if they are interested in same
field. They can talk about their interests and share their opinions about it. While
sharing opinion, they can become friends easily. If they have same opinion
about their interest, they would fight less than others since they think
similarly. Also, when they meet friends who have similar interests, there would
be a lot to talk about and after they are talking, they would already be
friends.
Second, if they join a club, they do works
that require team work. If they need to do works that require team work, they
need to communicate well. When they are communicating about their work, friends
will listen carefully and they also need to listen to friend’s opinion well.
Since they are listening to others’ opinions carefully, they can know each
other well. Since knowing each other well is a very important thing to do to
make friends, they can make friends easily if they do works that require team
work.
Joining a club has many benefits. Students
can meet friends who are interested in similar things and they can be friends
with other students easily since they do works that require team work. In this
regard, I strongly believe that the most effective way to make new friends is
joining a club.
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