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Some people believe that by increasing the tax
which the government imposes the company on
companies as they destruct destroy the environment, they can prevent the
excessive demolition of the environment by the company, whereas others think that the
tax could would not be helpful for the
preservation of the environment. If I had to choose among with them, I would agree with
the former statement, since by the means of
regulation as taxing, the government can develop new methods to preserve their
eco-system and also force the companies to make their products
more eco-friendly.
First of all, the
government can have a change for company's companies’ perception about the environmental
matters with by
enforcing the increased tax. Obviously, pursuing profits is their the companies’ most important purpose that their
efforts, so they would want to prevent heavy
tax which reducing would reduce their
profits. For example, If the governments forced high taxes to the companies
that had been a negative influence on the environments,
they could not avoid would not be able to
avoid increased pay for production costs. In order to reduce the
decrease of profits, they would consider this environmental problem more
seriously than before. Consequently,
it will lead to their products' traits to be
more eco-friendly. Therefore, it is necessary that control of the
government controls companies to the company
for the preservation of the environment.
Secondly, the
right regulation is an effective method for
protecting the environment. With the additional tax, the government can be
allowed using could use this increased
budget to invest in the certain various
methods such as campaigns and programs which are preserving would
preserve the environment. For instance, according to some research by
Korea University, when they investigated several countries that were well known for making eco-friendly materials,
they had a same tendency that to have
40% more campaign and research related to solve an solving environmental problems
than other countries. Also, if the government would extend the program when it comes to improving
consumer's awareness on environmental matters,
the consumer would reduce refrain from buying an environmentally harmful
products.
To sum up, by forcing
taxes to the less eco-friendly companies, the
government could induce a change in recognition of the company for the
environment, and also improving improve the means to produce more well-preserved
methods to care for the environment.
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