▶ Your Answer : A s Student's intellectual, social, and personal development is highly influenced by education. With this understanding, I believe that providing students with grades does not promote learning. This is because providing students with grades discourages them students to study from studying by putting them under stress and prevents students from thinking creatively.
First, providing students with grades discourages them students to study by putting them under stress. Understanding the daily environment of students is necessary to substantiate this view. Every morning, once students are at school, they have to endure countless assignments and exams at school and continue to study more even at home. This is because they have to get good grades from the exam. Such exhausting routine repeats itself and eventually wears them down. Therefore, as a way to manage the ensuing stress, schools should teach their students without grading system. Students could be provided more opportunities to mingle with peers such as playing sports and participating in club activities. This frees their minds from the intense mental pressure from school and they could focus on their studies more after having some of the free time with peers. In this regard, I believe that providing students with grades discourages them students to study; rather, school could stimulates students to study without grading system.
Second, providing students with grades prevents them from thinking creatively. In response to the increasing role of the creativity, Mmany expert opinions and research statistics reinforce the idea that school should encourage their students to think more creatively by offering education system without evaluation. My own experience demonstrates some advantages of the education system without grades. When I was a junior in college, I took an astrophysics class. It did not provide students with grades and did not have test neither. So, I could learn what I was interested in instead of learning for the test. We had a lot of discussions in the class. I could not only gain a lot of knowledge about astrophysics but also learn how to think creatively in the discussions. From my experience, I believe that providing students education without evaluation stimulates students to think creatively.
To sum up, I believe that providing students with grades does not promote learning. Consequently, the importance of my view cannot be underestimated for the reasons I have mentioned above.
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주제에 맞게 내용을 잘 구성해주셨습니다. provide students with grades라는 표현이 반복적으로 사용되니 동의어를 많이 활용해서 표현 부분을 더 풍부하게 만들어주시면 좋을 것 같아요. 수고 많으셨습니다~! Independent Writing Rubrics Score 4.5/5 An essay at this level largely accomplishes all of the following : - Effectively addresses the topic and task (주어진 주제에 대해 정확하게 이해하고 답변을 제시함) - Is well organized and well developed, using clearly appropriate explanations, exemplifications and/or details (적절한 설명과 예시를 사용하여 글을 전개・구성함) - Displays unity, progression and coherence (통일성, 연속성, 일관성을 보임) - Displays consistent facility in the use of language, demonstrating syntactic variety, appropriate word choice and idiomaticity, though it may have minor lexical or grammatical errors (사소한 어휘・문법적 오류를 보일 수는 있으나 대체로 적절한 어휘와 표현을 사용하고 다양한 형태의 문장, 유창한 언어 구사력을 보임) |