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Some people think that without the help of the internet, students can learn more efficiently. However, in my opinion, I strongly disagree with the above statement for the following two reasons. First, using the internet is has a time-efficient for studying. Second, the internet has numerous amount of information.
First, the internet can save our valuable time. This is because that we can access the internet through our phone due to advanced technology. In other words, So we can utilize this device however whatever we want. For example, when I was preparing for my Chinese exam, my biggest problem was the pronunciation. but Since I did not have enough a time to go to a language school because of my tight schedule, So I asked to my friend who majored in major was Chinese to help me out. She recommended me a about the Chinese pronunciation application. I used the that application during my free time. And also I could and checked my pronunciation constantly by the instructor through the application. As a result, I could enhance my Chinese pronunciation without disturbing my schedule.
Second, the internet contains a lot of information. Some people usually say called that the internet is the ocean of the information. This saying reflects that the internet has so many sources and we can use this to benefit for our studies. For example, when I was a university student, I had to write down for my graduation essay. And I chose a picked up the difficult subject for a my good grade. The problem was that when I went to the library to find the information about my topic, I could not find anything. So I asked for a to librarian the book that was related to my topic to the librarian, but she told me that they did not have anything for me that book. However, when I looked up my topic on the found the information on the internet , I took just took a few minutes to find some valuable information. Moreover, I got could get an unpredictable ideas for enhancing the quality of my essay. Due to the internet, I could finish my essay successfully and got a good grade.
To sum up, using the internet has good advantages such as being time-efficient and containing a lot of sources. In this regard, I personally disagree that without the help of the internet, students can learn more efficiently.
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