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Educational environments have been changed
immensely compared in comparison to the past. Some people say that it should not be allowed
for students to evaluate their teachers. In my opinion, however, students
should evaluate the performance of their teachers. This is mainly because it
will improve a teacher’s performance, and students will become more responsible
in their classes.
First of all, evaluation on a teacher’s performance
will enhance the quality of the materials taught in classes. This is attributable
to the fact that there are too many teachers who do not teach with qualified
materials. In fact, educational materials and curriculums should be updated continuously
since effective learning systems are continuously developed in these days. In
this regard, the performance evaluations will trigger teachers to update and
improve their education methods. For example, my uncle, who is a high school
teacher, had poor evaluation on his teaching performance from students two
years ago. Since then, he updated and improved his teaching skills for a year,
and he got the highest evaluation on his performances last summer. This indicates
that evaluation on teachers will make them to give more effort on their teaching
materials.
Secondly, students will become responsible for
their classes. This is due to the fact that students will pay more attention in
their class, since their evaluation on teachers will be in effect. That is, watching
things that change depend on their decisions will make them more responsible for
their classes. A recent statistical study conducted by the Korean government
revealed that the academic performance of students who evaluate their teachers on
regular basis increased significantly more than that of students do not
evaluate their teachers. This illustrates that students will pay more attention
in the class when they had to make accurate evaluation on their teacher’s performances.
In summary, evaluation on a teacher’s teaching performance
will enhance not only performances of teachers but also those of students in
the class. In this regard I strongly recommend for students to evaluate their
teachers. Good: 24~30 점수: 28 고칠게 별로 없는 잘 서술된 에세이인거 같습니다. 독립형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 것은 본인의 에세이를 통하여서 상대방을 설득할 수 있냐 입니다. 지금 이 에세이는 구체적인 예시와 설명을 통하여서 잘 서술된 거 같습니다. 특히 각 바디의 예시들이 이유를 잘 서포트 하고 있습니다. 문법적인 오류들도 별로 없구요. 수고많으셧습니다. |