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Some people think that the condition of the environment will not get better in the future, while other people think differently. Both sides may have their own reasons to support their view, If I have to choose one, I would say that the condition of the environment will become positive in the coming years. There are several reasons and example as follow. First of all, the government has made many new environmental regulations. Companies must follow these regulations. If companies does do not conform the regulations, they will be given significant fines. This means that companies have strong motive to avoid environmental contamination. For example, the Australian government implemented the new policy that charges tremendous fees to companies that flow chemical matters to river or lake. Because of this strict rules Thanks to such rules. the company tries to reduce harmful matters. As a result, the water of the Australia are becoming has become cleaner than the water in the past. On top of that, people are gradually charging charge their lifestyles more eco-friendly. And more and more people are realizing realize that even a few changing they make can have positive impact on the nature. As a result, many people decided to reduce the amount of trash they create. My family is excellent example of this. There is a TV program in the Korea that introduces people natural lifestyles and methods for reducing harmful impact on the environment. After watching this program, my family resolved to follow advice offered by the program. My father now commutes by subway instead of driving his car, my mother does not use plastic bags and I do not turn on the air conditioner in summer. And our neighborhood also begin following this method. To sum up, the government has implement new strict environmental policies and a lot of people are interested in natural lifestyles. In this regard, our future environment has bright outlook. Good: 24~30 점수: 26 일단 문법적 오류들이 있습니다. 특히 문법 동사 사용에 있어서 문제들이 보입니다 이러한 부분을 주의 하시면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 전체적인 내용이나 논리적인 부분을 보앗을때 아 주 잘 서술된 독립형 에세이인거 같 습니다. 각 바디의 예시와 설명들이 구체적으로 이유를 잘 서포트 하고 있습니다. 구조적으로 잘 서술하였습니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |