▶ Your Answer : There are several ways to save money for the government when a country confront confronts with economic crisis. Some people think that the government should spend less money on schools, public transit, or military. Although people might have different ideas and opinions regarding this, I think the government should invest less on public libraries. This is because there are many ways to read books. Also, school library can provide better environment for studies instead of public libraries. for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, people can read books through the Internet. As technology develops rapidly, people can read through devices such as computers or cell phones. According to the New York Times, over 65% of students read books by the Internet. They also said that they barely go to library for reading or borrowing to read and borrow books since the internet enables them to get diverse of materials such as books or journals with ease. Indeed, when I was in elementary school students the Internet books was were not common so that I used to go to public library to find books for homework. After few years, the Internet books became common and I did not go to public library to read books. Even I found that there were more materials on the Internet than public library had. In this situation, it is not benefit beneficial for the government to invest public libraries. Therefore, it is fare to say that the government should spend less on public libraries.
On top of that, school libraries provide better environment to studies. It is obvious that there are many public libraries with poor facilities. It makes people do not go there for studying. An anecdote of my own experience can illustrate this. When I was in college, I went to public library for preparing final exam. However, poor desks and chairs made me feel back hurt. Even, there were many people who speak loudly in library. I could not concentrate on my studying and had to go to school again to study. Contrary to public library, school library provided students to have decent desks and chairs. Besides, nobody made noise in library. It shows that school library is better to study rather than public library. In this sense, spending money on the public libraries is does not makes sense.
In a nutshell, all things considered, the government should invest less on public libraries when a country faced on financial crisis. This is because people can read books thorough the Internet and school library have better facilities to study. Good: 24~30 점수:25 잘 서술하였습니다. 하지만 좀 각 단락의 설명이 장황하단 느낌이 듭니다. 좀 더 간결하게 서술할 수 있음에도 불구하고 반복적인 문장을 서술하면서 장황하게 만들었습니다. 독립형 에세이에 있어서 가장 중요한 것은 에세이가 얼마나 설득력이 있나 입니다. 에세이를 좀 더 설득할 수 있게 만들려면 간결하게 본인의 의견을 설명하는 것이 더 좋을 거 같습니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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