▶ Your Answer : No doubt, advertising plays a vital role in people's daily lives. Some people think that any business should pour money into advertise advertisement to succeed, while others do not think differently. Both arguments may have their own reasons to support their ideas. If I had to choose one, I would say that spending money on ad for business is not the key to success. There are reason and example as follow for the following subsequent reason. To begin with, advertising is negatively affects negatively affects to company's overall profits. Today's advertising focus on the only bright part of their products and exaggerate their stories to improve their profits, which makes products look more colorful and dramatic than they actually one. This is likely to prevent prevents people from choosing the right product for their needs, so patrons who failed to buy their products for needs are never again buy that company's products on advertising. For example, Ghana, chocolate company ,put into money on advertising that it could be gain gained some energy from these components such as sugar and carbohydrate. After watching the ad on the television, parents bought the chocolate to promote power for their children. However, the young people suffered from diabetes and gain 10 pounds on average by consuming the sweet things. people realized that problem are complaints to advertising company overstated chocolate's function, which induced to company's bankrupt from decreasing their sales in spite of pouring a lot of money into advertising. It means that advertising brings about negative result of company's sales performance. Without spending money on advertising, the company's fame would not have fallen behind in business world. All things considered, I strongly believe that the disadvantages of pouring money into advertising for success far outweigh its advantage for the reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, the importance of advertising's drawback cannot be overestimated in the pursuit of success in business. Good: 24~30 점수: 24 일단 독립형 에세이에 있어서 한 가지 이유로 장황하게 서술하는 것 보다는 두 가지 이유로 간결하게 자신의 의견을 잘 전달하는 것이 중요합니다. 독립형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 이 에세이가 설득력이 있는 가 입니다. 한 가지 이유만 서술하는 것은 좋긴 하지만 이 에세이에서도 보앗듯이 장황하게 만드는 경향이 있습니다. 따라서 두 가지 이유로 간결하게 에세이를 서술하는 것 을 추천합니다. 수고많으셧습니다. |