▶ Your Answer :
Imagine you have endless goals to achieve as soon as you have just
accomplished one. It might be frustrating. Just like this, studying with
no ends can make you wear out slowly. That is why I strongly agree
with the idea that students should have a yearlong break before strarting
starting university.
Students have not had enought enough
time to think about their real interests and
dream jobs because of the twelve-year studying
for Korean SAT(Sooneung). They have been studying for only one goal, to get a
good grade on SAT and attend their dreaming dream
university. However, this kind of test does not give them any clues on future
careers or on what fields of studying they should major in at the
university. Sadly, four years of studying of their major is critical for
students when they consider getting a job. Without deep consideration of the
majors, there would be higher chances for
students to change their major later that those who firmly know
their interests that are linked to their future jobs. (위 사유 때문에 1년 동안 휴학을 하는 게 좋다, 라고 결론을 적어주세요)
Also, students have rights to have a break from studying. However, many of
them choose to study for four years right after twelve-year studying at schools
because they feel they do not have enought enough
time to meet the requirements for graduating or getting a dreaming job.
They feel insecure of having breaks while studying at university. That is why
it is not easy for them to decide when to take a rest or how many semesters they
should take a break for.
Therefore, it is better for every student to
have a yearlong break before starting to study at university.
Four years of studying their
major is important for students because it is the cornerstone that makes
a good start in their lives. Just like stepping backwards before making a
big step by jumping forward, taking a yearlong break before attending
university can be an essential moment in your life.
Writing
0-30 Score Scale |
Fair (17-23) |
Score |
20 |
Overall
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