▶ Your Answer : It is controversial that between parents and older brothers or sisters, who should take care of children. In this regard, I strongly believe that parents should more take care of their children. This is because brothers or sister do not don't have skills caring their siblings and parents are the most closest and important people in children's life.
To begin with, as brothers or sisters are usually also young children, they cannot take care of their young siblings well. However, parents already have experience of raising their children. To be specific, older brothers and sisters do not don't know what to do when their siblings are crying and screaming. If brothers or sisters take inappropriate action, iIt may make babies unhappy. For example, I have 2 siblings and they are still elementary school students. When they are babies, I always try to take care of them but it is not easy and sometimes they cry due to my bad reaction. However, my mother knew how to stop crying and always made a better result than me. Thus, I think that parents should take care of their young children.
Moreover, parents are the most important and closest people in children's life. To be specific, parents are the first people whom babies meet and parents are teachers for them. For instance, in psychology, parents' actions affect babies' whole life. Babies learn how to live from their parents, not from their sisters or brothers. So, positive relationship between kids and parents is crucial for children's life. If parents do not spend much time with their children and make bad memory, cChildren may have to live unhappy and sad life due to trauma. Therefore, parents should take care of their young children to make them mentally healthy even if they are busy with their works.
To sum up, I strongly argue that parents must not pass their duty of raising for the following reasons I mentioned above: older sisters and brothers do not know how to take care of their younger siblings and parents are the most important people in children's life.
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