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Undoubtedly, study plays a significant role in people’s daily lives in many of the places where they work or play. There must be many ways to succeed in students’ studies at college or university such as have access to tutors in university who help students that have difficulties in assignment, get support from family and friends while attending in university, and learn under excellent teachers in high school. (No need to mention all) If I were asked to choose one, I would say that ask to learning from professional tutors in university is the best way to succeed in their studies. There are several reasons as follows. To begin with, when students have difficulties in their assignment then they could get help directly from tutors allows them to improve their sense of responsibility. Scheduling with tutors requires students to be diligent, passionate, and self-disciplined. When these personal traits are developed, it is likely to bring a better result. For example, my youngest brother did poorly in junior-high school. He got distracted easily, procrastinated, and acted on the spur of the moment. However, he has changed little by little after he started getting access to tutors when he cannot resolve his computer science assignment. He realized that his punctuality to get answer from tutor could help him work more quickly and accurately, while his laziness could negatively affect his work. (Awkward sentence) Naturally, he started to maintain a good behavior by raising his grades in school. He showed characteristics of a longer attention span, a stronger passion in his tasks, and a better ability to delay gratification. Without a tutor, he would have fallen behind. All things considered, I strongly believe that the advantages of access to tutors far outweigh those of other options for the reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, the importance of getting help from tutors cannot be overestimated in the pursuit of happiness in life. 채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 2 | 1 | 2 | 2 | Score | Limited 7-10 | - 밑줄 친 부분은 템플릿에 맞추신 부분인데, 억지로 맞추다 보니 내용이 어색해지고 의미가 불분명합니다.
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