▶ Your Answer : Some people take it for granted that the university should make volunteer works as being mandatory for students. However, from my personal opinion, I strongly believe that It is useless since forced volunteer works will not helpful to raise students’ morality at all and students should take higher priority on their study not on volunteer works.
First of all, It is crucial for students to learn not only practical and useful knowledges knowledge (knowledge는 셀 수 없는 단어이기 때문에 s안 붙임) but also building up a right perspective and ethics. When a university have has a mind to make volunteer work as a course they might expect student to be a person who is willing to land their hand to others who are in trouble. However, universities’ effort to raising raise students’ mortality could be came to nothing if they forced them to do volunteer works regardless of their willingness. To illustrate my point better, take myself as an example, when I was in hight high school we should achieve specific time when it comes to volunteering. Otherwise, we could not gain a good grade in ethic class. I was not interested in helping others whereas it was mandatory so I decided to do volunteer work at the local community center. In there, a manager asked me to do laundry for the disabled. It was not rewarding at all and made me exhausted. At last, I became a person who is more reluctant to do volunteer works for nothing. If I had been abled able to participate volunteer work with my free will, I could have enjoyed and had good impression about volunteering.
Moreover, the university must encourage Students to focus on their study not on subsidiary activities. This is because volunteer activities tend to take up a lot of time so it ended up having negative effect on their grades. Suppose that students have to both maintain great grade and fill up a great deal of volunteering time. Is it possible for them to keep their good grade? The answer will be “no”. It is absurd to killing two birds with one stone. Take one of my friends as an example, the university that my friend is attending requires students to participate in specific volunteering time. She was doing the dual degree program so she had always her hands full with assignments. Inevitably, She stayed up everyday to finish up her major assignments and on the weekend she went the Kindergarten children to do the volunteer work. In the long run, she got sick on account for overworking and had to stayed in the hospital for two weeks. If she had taken a rest and had time to refresh her self at least on the weekend she would have been healthy as always.
All things considered, I would say It is not a good idea that universities made volunteering as an obligation. This is because forced volunteer works do not motivate students at all and they already have a plenty of assignments to deal with. Good: 24~30 점수: 25 일단 전반적으로 아주 논리적으로 에세이를 풀어 나갔습니다. 특히 이 에세이에서 가장 좋았던 점은 예시 사용입니다. 첫 번째 바디나 두 번째 바디 둘 다 본인의 이유를 가장 잘 서포트 해줬습니다. 독립형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 것은 본인의 에세이를 가지고 상대방을 설득 시킬 수 있냐 입니다. 지금 이 에세이는 이러한 면을 잘 충족시키는 거 같습니다. 적절한 예시사용으로 인해 많은 사람들이 본인의 에세이를 읽고 본인의 아이디어에 설득 당할 거 같습니다. 수고하셨습니다.
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