Some people believe that today's young people are more independent on their parents to make decisions for them. However, in my opinion, in the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them, and today's young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. This is because these days, parents’ opinions may not be suitable for young people’s life and young people get information for themselves in a wide variety of ways.
To begin with, I think that since these days the society is are changing rapidly briskly. That means parents’ opinions became less important to are not suitable for young people when making a decision. In the past, people lived similarly with parents’ life because the world is similar to that world which parents lived in. (What does it mean?) So, parents’ advices and concerns are were very precious and important for their life. Obviously, they followed their parents’ opinions even when making a decision for their life. But nowadays the world is changing fast. Today is different from yesterday, and tomorrow is different from today. Hence, there is a possibility that our parents’ experiences or opinions become old fashion.
On top of that, I believe that young people can get a lot of useful information from the internet for their life. As what I mentioned, the world is changing very fast. And it follows that our and technologies are being developed are developed very much so that we can access to a lot of information which is related to us. We can easily find useful information and we can select and use it. In other words, there are a lot of things which are more useful and more accurate than parents’ opinions.
I believe that we can feel it if we just look at some generations. My grandfather learned about agriculture from his father. And obviously, his father’s saying was facts and truths. The knowledge from him was all which he should know. But if we turn our eyes to our generation, then we can figure out that we don’t need to know about our parents’ knowledge that much. (Unclear meaning) Many of us should know how to use the internet or how to go to the universities not how to deal with the world like the parents did. (Not essential)
To sum up, I believe today's young people are less dependent on their parents' decision while making a decision this is because~(mention your two reasons here) better able to make decisions about their own lives without parents’ opinion because there is a high likelihood that parents’ opinions become old and also, we can get more accurate and useful information from the internet.
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