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Some people think television advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed. However I disagree with this opinion with following examples reasons. First, advertising products which is made for kids have to show the children. Second, experience showed in television when they are young can help to create personality more familiar.
First of all, goods for children are affected to customers when children advertise in television (무슨 뜻인가요?). This is mainly because people can know how to use product to their children directly. Suppose that an adult shows an advertisement of the drink for children in television. Would be possible to know that drink is for kids easily? The answer is no. If an adult drinks the merchandise in television, people might think it is for adults when they see the advertisement. For example, there were two advertisement showing the baby’s toy. One was a video that two babies play with the toy, and the other one is an adult explains how to use it. When two toys began to sell, the first product were sold more than the second one even if the second one was reasonable prices. Therefore people tend to buy when they saw an advertisement that have main character is related to the merchandise’s owner. In this regard, I learned goods for children have effects when children appear in advertisement. (논지가 벗어놨습니다. 이 에세이의 주제는 아이들에게 향한 광고가 좋냐? 이런것이지 애들이 광고에 나타나야하냐에 대한 에세이가 아닙니다 off topic입니다)
Second, children who appeared in television advertisement are more close to people. Since they experienced the work with a lots of adults when they were young, they already knew how to talk and behave in front of adults. Moreover they worked with new face people, they can learn about way to deal with the new face people. Interestingly, according to a survey done by a group of psychology majors in Korea university, 72% of the people who have experience performed in television answered that they changed their personality after they appeared television programs. They answered since they acted in front of many people so their characteristic could be more vigorous and active. Also they could learn to cooperate with other people because they underwent when they were five. I thought of this survey because the results of the report resonated with my thoughts.
To sum up, television advertising directed toward young children is good because goods for kids are affected customers to buy and children can close to people. Consequently, the importance of my view cannot be underestimated for the reasons I have mentioned above. Limited: 12~16 점수: 15 에세이가 off topic입니다. 이 에세이의 주제는 어린아이에게 향한 광고가 좋은것인가에 대한거지. 광고에 아이들이 나타는것이 좋은 건가에 에세이가 아닙니다. 하지만 본인은 바디2다 아이들이 광고에 나오는 것이 좋냐에 대한 에세이였습니다. 문법적으로 틀린 부분이 없지만, 완전히 off topic이기 때문에 점수가 많이 깍였습니다. 다음번에는 이유를 서술 하실 때 에세이 주제를 잘 읽으시고 에세이를 쓰시는 것이 좋을 거 같습니다. 수고하셧습니다. |