▶ Your Answer :
The word easy and
comfortable mean that we can do a task faster without much effort. Then how do
you think about the suggestion that todays life is easier than the past days? There
have been controversial issue between two opposite arguments that the past is easier
to live than nowadays. Although some people say that the present days is more
comfortable to live, others point out that the past was not as complicate as
todays society. In my opinion, I would like to say that recent days are easier and
much comfortable to live than past days by following reasons. First of all, one of
the reasons that I can give is the computer made many kinds of tasks simple. To
be specific, people who want to have an agreement from their boss about their document
don’t have to go to their boss’s room to face him/her. They can have a boss’s agreement
by sending e-mail to their boss. When I was in the high school, my homeroom teacher
stated that he spent hard time when he was freshmen in the school because he
had to visit president’s room regularly to do his tasks. However, after the
personal computer had released, he could do all his job keeping his body on the
chair. By this reason, it would be safe to say that people can live much comfortable
daily life than the past because of the computer.
Furthermore, another
reason that I can suggest is that people can purchase product easier and faster.
In other words, people can use their money just by one gesture through smart
pay. Before the smart pay was made, people have to fill out the complicate form
because of security. However, after the smart pay technology was invented, people
don’t have to go through that annoying stage. Only thing they need is their fingerprints.
For example, when I wanted to buy some product in online, the stage of purchase
took most of time and sometimes it took more than an hour. However, with smart
pay I didn’t have to spend many times to pay anymore. For this reason, I would
like to say that today’s technology makes people more comfortable than the past.
Apparently, there
are some advantage of past life. In other words, past technology was easier to
understand and utilize because theses were simple than today’s one. For example,
the smart phone has too many functions to know all of them and people who used
old phone need times to totally understand this product. However, no one can deny
that the fact that these smart phone’s functions are useful for our life once people
understand how to use that. That’s why I request that past is hard to live than
today.
In short, both opponents
and proponents have debated over this disputable issue and both sides seem to
have good reasons to support the argument. Nevertheless, from my perspectives, I
would be confident that today’s life is easier to live than the past because of
the computer and development of technology. 511 단어
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