▶ Your Answer : There is ample support for author's claim that there are three causes of whale stranding. However, professor in the lecture gives several reasons as a rebuttal to the author's claim. First, professor argues that the author didn't account for the fact that whale strandings take place around the world where there are variety of wind patterns. Professor says that whales ofen come to eastern coast of the United States, where the wind blows toward the opposite direction of land. This casts doubt on the author's argument that whale strandings are caused by wind patterns, which push cold water and carries whale's prey animals and make whales follow the flow of water to feed themselves. Second, professor contends that perfectly healthy whales also become stranded. Professor says that if humans push whales back into the water, whales swim back to the sea on their own. If whales were sick, they won't be able to swim back. This refutes the author's suggestion that whale strandings are due to whale's illness, which makes whale weak and unable to swim and thus whales are pushed closer to the shore by currents and waves. Lastly, professor insists that all whales use same sonar system to detect but some whales become stranded while others don't. If whales have similar or same sonar system, it is strange that only a few whales are stranded. This counters the author's assertion that whales are stranded because of geological features of certain coastlines. It said that ocean floor adjacent to beaches tend to have more gentle slopes, so it makes hard for whales to detect them.
점수: 22 리딩에 대한 정보가 많이 부족한 통합형 에세이입니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우에 있어서는 리딩에 대한 부분이 각 단락에서 한 문장으로만 서술하였는데. 한 문장으로 서술하는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 부분들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |