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alone cannot express the importance of higher education. One should not,
however, fall prey to the misconception that parents in the past have more involvement
about their children’s education. I, therefore, strongly believe that interests
of parents on children’s education have been increased in modern society. There
are two reasons that underscore the validity of this statement. Firstly, these days, whereas power of public
education institute was decreasing, power of private education institute was
increasing. This is because there are only few private academic institutes in
the past. So there are rare difference from education quality among students,
because most of students can get only the public education. However, really
many number of private academics spread around us, even in the rural city. For
these circumstances, competition of getting grade is higher. Quality of private
education have been considered as important factor for getting difference from
other students. So information of parents about good private academic
institutes is really critical issues among parents and students. As I mentioned
above, these days, parents want to take more care their children about education
than the past.
Secondly, in the past, most of people
including students focus on making money rather than studying. When my mother
was young, my country, South Korea, was really poor and developing country.
This is because my country experienced a big war called Korean War. So, people
were living a poor life with deficient materials and lack of foods. In
these severe situations, it is not easy for students to study without
any disturbance. Especially, in the past, most of people were engaged in agriculture.
It means that they need more human force. Parents and children are
usually work all day to get many harvests and to get more money. As my
mother’s experience illustrates, my country’s people in the past can never
consider their education or their children’s education unlike my country’s current situation.
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