▶ Your Answer : Nowadays, as people are interested in successful people (Just successful people or characteristics of successful people?) there is a standing issue on whether successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well or not. (Need paraphrase) Both sides may have their own reasons to support their view. If I were asked to choose one, I would say that successful people only doing what they know how to do well rather than try new things for several reasons as follows. First of all, people who prefer to do things that they do well can make the best result by more concentrating on their own works. If people will try new things and take risks, he or she should care about a lot of works which are distracting. (In what way?) However, if people can concentrate on their own works they can make better results in comparison to the other. In this regard, successful people developed their skills in their areas and became successful experts. (Give an example) This example depicts that successful people prefer to do works they are good at compared to the other works because they can make a better result by concentrating on works well. On top of that, successful people could save their time through teamwork. (How does it relate to trying new things and risks?) People should spend a great amount of time trying new things and taking risks. However, successful people could save time by making use of other people's abilities. Let me take my father as an example, although he is was a successful succeeded architect and he didn't prefer to try new things and take risks. Moreover, he thought experts should do their own works because these (What are these, works?) were too difficult and took a lot of time. Therefore, he asked the accountant when he needed to try something new instead. (Why did he do that?) He said he could save a lot of time and make good result by choosing this method. By looking at this example it is clear that successful people do works that they are good at rather than taking risks because they could spend their time effectively with the support of their colleagues. All in all, every and each fact describes my resolute stand point that successful people tend to do things they are good at rather than to try new things because people can make better result by concentrating on their own works and saving time. Therefore, nothing in my mind casts doubt on my stance regarding the given statements.
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- Save time과 successful people이 새로운 것을 도전하는 것이 어떤 상관관계가있으며, cooperation은 어떤 이유에서 언급이 된 것인가요?
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