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people think that movies don’t do not (독립형 에세이에서는 줄인말을 서술하면 안됩니다) tell a lot about a country and movies are just a
fake story. However, in my opinion, movies tell a lot about a country. The
reasons are there are historical movies and movie shows the real place with its
screen. for the following two subsequent reasons.
First
of all, there are movies whose topic is history movies talk about the history of a country. That kind of movie tells us
the background knowledge of the event, the sequences of the event and the result
of the event. Such movies discuss the sequence of the event and the result By just watching the movie, we gradually get to know the history
of the country. For example, last year I saw a movie, ‘Myong Lyang’, whose main
character is ‘Lee Soon Shin’, Korean general. Before I saw the movies, I don’t
know anything of him did not know anything about him (과거형으로 예시를 시작했기 때문에 과거형으로 서술하시길 바랍니다). However, after I saw the movie, I got to apprehend the battle
he participated in and understand the circumstance in Korea at that time began to appreciate him in terms of winning the battle. In other
words, movie tells and teaches us the history of a country.
Also,
the movie’s trait is that we can enjoy the movie both visually and hearing people can enjoy from watching movie. With
the help of visual trait, the screen shows the places of a country. It displays
the place vividly, so even though I’ve never got to that place, I can feel like
I am in the place. For example, by watching ‘Hae woon dae’, whose background is
the sea of Busan in Korea, we can feel like we are really in the situation and enjoy
the nature of Busan we are in the city of Pusan. In other words, we can experience the country indirectly
even though we really don’t get to the country.
To
sum up, historical movies tell and show the past of the country. Moreover,
movie’s screen show the place, so we can show the place of the country. In this
regard, I firmly hole that a county can be told a lot by movies. think movies tell a lot about a country
점수: 23 일단 각 단락에 있어서 문제를 가지고 있는 독립형 에세이입니다. 첫 번째 단락 같은 경우에 있어서는 어색한 표현과 문법적인 오류들이 많습니다. 이러한 부분들은 제가 지적한 부분을 숙지하면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 두 번째 단락 같은 경우에 있어서는 주제와 관련이 너무 없습니다. 좀 더 에세이를 서술할 때 주제와 연관을 시키면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니디ㅏ. 수고많으셧습니다.
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