▶ Your Answer :
I agree with that films implies many features about a country. Even
though, it could be differentiated by the films’ genre, mostly a background of
a film is created in the light of realistic characters of a nation. There are two
reasons why I insist on this idea. I agree with the statement that films talk a lot about a country for the following two subsequent reasons (인트로에 적절하지 않는 에세이입니다. 훅 도 없고 상대방의 의견 또한 나타나지 않았습니다)
Firstly, as I
told, films are based on the region where the film was made films are based on country's region. To create a film, a
director must decide a place to create the movie. Computer graphics are fabulous
and commonly used to make realistic backgrounds of films, but to make those realistic
backgrounds, they have to go through a researching process about a certain
nation (이러한 과정과 주제와 무슨 상관관계가 있느지 파악이 되지 않습니다). For example, the movie, Avengers is known as loads of uses of computer
graphics. However, most of computer graphics in the film was for to body out
impossible scenes in certain cities, such as exploding New York and invading aliens
in Busan can not show realistically about the country. Also, no matter these scenes were not filmed in the region, each
component is come from features of the cities.
Secondly, many
directors still seek to draw real life. Not only good films, but also bad films
talk about our life. When we think about best movies which lots of people have chosen,
they always talk about our life and give us a lesson from our life. Because of
it, directors always observe the world before they create a film, from behavior
of people, how they live, what they live for, and where they live. Thus, observing
places where people live is important to make a good film, and good observation
gives more details of the country.
In summary, I suggest
that films show many things about a country because backgrounds of a film are
usually based on a specific country and directors want to put more realistic features
on their films to make good movies.
점수: 22 일단 이 에세이를 익으면서 느낀 것은 전체적으로 주제를 벗어난 거 같습니다. 각 단락의 설명이나 예시들을 보앗을 때 주제와 전혀 상관이 없는 거 같습니다. 독립형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 설득력 인데. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우는 주제를 벗어났기 때문에 설득력이랑은 거리가 멉니다. 따라서 좀 더 주제에 연관을 주면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |