Teachers have contributed to this society by helping making a lot of the wise students to be wise.
Some people believe that teachers are more highly evaluated in today's society since they have to care larger score of the student, (Awkward) while other people think differently.
If I were asked to choose, I would say that the teacher's teaching is actually valued less than in the past.
There are several reasons and examples as follows.
To begin with, many replacements of teachers exist in today.
To be specific, many education systems are developed in today compared to the past.
So, the role of teacher in teaching students 's teaching is not important as much as in the past.
Also, in sometimes, the replacement such as lecture of animation is more effective than acquiring from school teacher sometimes.
Since a information in the lecture is made with the very professional and exact information by many experts. (Unclear)
For instance, according to an experiment of Tokyo University, the video is a better method to teach students than learning from teachers educate them.
They divided into two groups with methods to learn and test them, the team A watched the lecture video of animation and the team 2 listen took the lecture from their school teachers.
As a result, the team A's average score was higher than team B. (Why's that?)
On top of that, the teachers are more impersonal than the past 10 years ago since many recnet people just want to earn a large amount of money.
So, they usually don't spend their time to personally care about the students or talk their daily life to students.
I think that it is the main reason why recent teachers are not highly assessed treated.
For example, when I was an 8, my classmates very really liked our teacher since she spent a lot of the time to take care of us by sharing the common interest same interesting.
But, in high school after the middle school, the most of teachers only spent their time in teaching and didn't try to make us laugh.
Also, students naturally concentrate on only their studying, not teachers.
What I mean is by that recent teacher nowadays is more impersonal than past and it causes teacher less evaluated.
Sum up, today's teachers are so impersonal and they can be replaced by many things such as question book or video.
In this regard, I firmly assert that today's teacher is less appreciated compared to past sin
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