▶ Your Answer : The reading passage contends that increasing a special tax on tobacco would have several advantages. On the other hand, the lecturer brings up several points that contradict this argument. First of all, the lecturer points that the young people would still buy tobacco even with the increase of the tax on it. This is attributed to the fact that there is a black market, where Smugglers sell cigarette. They sell it cheaper than the real market so the young people are able to afford it. Also, smugglers sell it even without checking the ID, so people aged 12 to 24 can buy it. This refutes the author’s point that the increasing tax on cigarettes can make young people to buy it less. Moreover, in the lecture, the point is made that there wouldn’t be a additional provision of money to fight environmental problems. This is because there wouldn’t be enough revenue for the government to afford it. With the raising of the tax on tobacco, few people will buy it. It leads to a decrease in sale and eventually a decrease in a tax revenue. This casts doubt on the idea in the reading passage that rising the tax on cigarettes will help repair the environmental harm caused by the cultivation of tobacco. The final point made by the lecturer is that the increased tax revenues will not be helpful to reduce poverty. It is obvious that tobacco industry is providing a lot of jobs in parts such as agriculture, manufacture and sales. However many jobs will disappear with the reduce of the demand on cigarettes. As a result, such unemployment will lead to more poverty. This is different from the passage’s view that higher revenues can help poor people.
Fair: 17~23 점수: 23 리딩에 대한 정보가 많이 부족한 통합형 에세이입니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것 중에 하나는 서로 다른 정보를 가진 리딩과 리스닝이 주제에 대하여서 어떻게 서로 반박하고 있는 지 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우는 리스닝에 대한 정보는 충분하게 서술되어 있지만. 리딩에 대한 것은 한 문장으로만 설명 되어 있습니다. 한 문장으로 끝내는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 문장들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |