▶ Your Answer : In the reading passage, there is ample support for the author's claim that Everglade will be ruined perpetually by human activities. However, in the lecture, the professor gives several reasons as a rebuttal to the author's point. First, the professor contends that chemical problems in the area are being solved positively. New government regulation contains a rule of the poisonous chemical uses. It compels the people changing their fertilizers to new one which has less risky materials. This casts doubt on the reading passage's argument that fertilizers which are used in agricultural facilities have very hazardous substances, so they demolish wildlife in the Everglades. Next, the professor insists that the soil loss will be lowered. people People (문장을 시작할 때에는 대문자로 서술하시길 바랍니다) in the Everglade begin to recover the soil. It will take little time to soil restoration. This counters the reading passage's assertion that after the 19th century when the US government drained far-reaching areas of the Everglades, fertile soil in the Everglade could disappear the next 25 years. Finally, the professor maintains that protection of wildlife in the Everglade can be realized. Florida government purchased 700 square kilometers grounds in the region. They will change this area which was used for sugar plantation in the old days to marsh land. Many animals like panthers will have more opportunities of survival. to survive This refutes the reading passage's suggestion that human development in the Everglades such as houses and farms have threatened the animals habitats.
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