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The reading passage contends that increasing the tax of cigarettes have some benefits. On the other hand, the lecturer brings up several reasons that contradict this argument. First, the speaker argues that the higher tax on tobacco doesn't prevent young people buying cigarettes. This is because a recent study shows that youth can buy tobacco black market, and the smugglers can afford tobacco to youth in cheap prices. Moreover, they never check the ID. This casts doubt on the reading passage's claim that the expensive price of cigarettes will stop young people smoking.
Second, according the lecturer, raising the tax have no benefits to provide the additional government revenue for environment. The reason is that if the tax of tobacco increased, less people would buy the cigarettes, and then there would be fewer revenue from selling cigarettes Eventually the government has less tax revenue from cigarettes. This refutes the reading passage's assertion that the higher price of tobacco can help the environment to repair.
The final point made by the lecturer is that the revenue from cigarette tax cannot relieve poverty and even can make worse poverty. This is supported by the fact that cigarette industry can create a lot of job. To be specific, if these job positions disappears, many people became poor. This counters the reading passage's argument that the revenue which is came from tax on cigarettes will help people to relieve poverty.
점수: 23 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우에 있어서는 리스닝에 대한 부분은 구체적으로 잘 전달하고 있습니다. 하지만 리딩에 대한 부분은 각 단락에서 한 문장으로만 서술하였습니다. 한 문장으로 리딩에 대한 부분을 끝내는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 부분들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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